I have a 39,000 word SF novella that I could use some hasty feedback on. I’m looking for ways to make it shorter and things that are confusing, unbelievable, or dull. If you can get feedback to me by Monday that would be awesome.
Edited to add: I’ve got enough folks to look at this draft. If you are up for being a round 2 reader let me know. I’ll likely have a revision ready to go on Tuesday.
Since it’s a monster, if you’re up for reading it let me know and I’ll email you the manuscript. Here’s the sampler.
Kiss Me Twice
by Mary Robinette KowalBy the time Scott Huang took his second step into the precinct, the department AI had taken four hundred and fifty-seven images of him. The flesh and blood officers on the night shift were coming back to the station to log out, but the other F&B members of the homicide department wouldn’t turn up for work till eight. As Huang reached his desk, the cameras on Metta’s desktop interface swiveled in his direction.
“Well, hello sailor.” Mae West’s voice purred from his desk. Over the interface, Mae West’s head appeared and looked him up and down.
“Diamond Lil!” Huang had a weakness for starlets from the days of mono-vision, black & white in particular and Metta customized her interface for him regularly.
But this, this was special.
If you’ll still have me, I’ll do it now. Being stuck in bed sucks.
EDIT: And yes, my GMail is open right this second. So bad about that. -.-
Sent! Thank you.
Hey there! I’d be interested to give it a go, sure. A few warnings and caveats, though: How hasty is hasty? Would tomorrow or even friday be okay? Also, I am not a professional writer, and English is not my native tongue. But I read a lot, mostly in English, and I’d be glad to try and help you out.
Perfect! Having reader feedback is exactly what I’m looking for.
Because I don’t have enough to do this week… Sure! I’d be happy to read and give you some feedback! (Full disclosure: I’m also writing an SF mystery piece right now. No murder, though. Well, not yet, anyway.)
I like SF, murder mysteries, AND novellas, so I’d definitely be interested in helping with it.
I would love to read it, but I am about to start three 12 hour shifts in a row. If this weekend is an ok time frame, I would be happy to take a look.
That’s actually perfect since I’m likely to have some revisions done by then.
Looks like I can probably help out if you need another set of eyes.
I may be able to help next week if you still need eyes. E-mail me if you need crit creds 🙂
I’d love to help in spirit, but alas, I don’t have the time. Good luck!
I should be available for the second round!
There is an old song….WWII
“Kiss me once. And kiss me twice.
And kiss me once again.
It’s been a long, long time….”
I’ll volunteer for a revision slot.
I’d love to read it, but I’m swamped on weekdays right now. If your next round lines up with the weekend, I’m game. 🙂