Alright folks. I need people to read a short story and give me feedback before I send it off. I’ll put the first thirteen lines here, and if anyone wants to take a look drop me an email. It’s 1300 words long (about six pages) and my first stab at horror, (but there’s no blood and gore).
The Promise of Chocolate
by Mary Robinette Kowal
The inside was dark. Allison had considered using milk chocolate instead, but thought the rich, almost bitter taste of a dark chocolate center would blend better with the almond flavor of cyanide. She had wanted to make a cake for her son’s birthday, but could not figure out how to limit the poison to a single piece, so–cupcakes. Rich cupcakes filled with a dark chocolate center and wrapped in festive red paper, all save the special one. She had baked that one in plain white paper to make certain that she did not give it to someone else by accident.
Allison had to admit that Jonas had not meant to ruin her life but he had done so as completely as if he had planned it.